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Like Singing In Hell (sestina) by Will Dockery
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Orson Wells as CitizenCain
2008-12-14 20:15:12 UTC
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Speaking of tentative thoughts,
You haven't had a thought in years, you dreadful dunce.



the first (probably scrapped, but
maybe
not)
pizza delivery roundabout traffic-light jottings of a sestina used these
4:06
tricks
pines
sticks
window
dream
As I "translate" the ballpoint-pen scribblings into type right now, I'm
thinking of posting it here, but probably will wait for another try
first,
since so many of my newsgroup friends are waiting with such anticipation
(while so few are showing any leads on "how it should be", of course) for
/my/ sestina.
I just came across this one buried in my notepad, so here it is, C&C
Like A Ringing A Bell (sestina)
Ride the four-o-six,
been on them tricks.
Born in the pines,
way out in the sticks.
Hanging over by the window,
same old song and dream.
They met again in a dream,
she didn't go on until six.
In the booth by the window,
discussing common tricks.
She lived out in the sticks,
as the crow flies over the pines.
She misses him, secretly pines,
hard to tell if it was a dream.
Reading messages in the sticks,
taught to her when she was six.
The help don't get her tricks,
"You missed a spot on the window."
She said no, by the window,
staring out at the pines.
The key was part of her trick,
and she lied about that dream.
He had to leave before six,
on the long road back to the sticks.
She lit an incense stick,
splashing rain on the window.
Ran everyone out at six,
exiled the man to the pines.
Made a mess of his dreams,
just the same old tricks.
Reached in her bag of tricks,
pulled out her sticks.
Someday babe, you'll follow that dream,
daylight in the window.
the herbs smelled like pines,
reminds me of 1996.
Tricks in the morning sticks, dreaming that she was once his.
He knows she pines but he had to leave by six.
FUCK that was horrible

I think you caused one of my kidneys to temporarily stop functioning
Orson Wells as CitizenCain
2008-12-14 20:15:46 UTC
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In rec.arts.poems on Sat, 13 Dec 2008 08:30:31 -0800 (PST), Will
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I just came across this one buried in my notepad, so here it is, C&C
Like A Ringing A Bell (sestina)
Something's gone wrong with your copying and pasting
No, it seems to be working okay, Pete, thanks for the comment, though.


Something's gone wrong with your ability to read and write.
Orson Wells as CitizenCain
2008-12-24 13:17:51 UTC
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Only because Dockery stole the article <slap>
Writes the man(?) who just copy-and-pasted a poem in another
thread yesterday and tried to pass it off as his(?) own...
Dockery if you're so confused you can't tell genders
The guy's posting under a girl's name... no confusion about that,
my little midget friend.
..how stupid you are? "We know, stupid."
... heh. You know stupid like you invented it? "We know."
Let me guess...you're the pitcher to Dockery's catcher? Watch
out...I hear he loves "spit balls."
heh - where'd ya hear that?
The tiny voices in his even tinier homoerotic brain, obviously... heh.
He's obviously very turned on by the idea of you engaging in these
activities he's bringing up? WtF * If we adopt the 'bot psychology
POV, these pronouncements it makes are the work of the person who
designed the vocabulary of the bot - typically the programmer. So it
is that individual - the coder [or "programmer"] of the bot - that has
such an obvious crush on you. Or it could be that the thing is just
programmed to send that type of output to whomever it's targeted to -
you, in this case.
Note that it's incapable of coming up with a directed response -
probably has memory problems similar to the CyberTwin bot - I.E.
doesn't remember the beginning of conversations, and so on.
Which raises the really creepy part: It looks like the coder has
modified either the bot's database or the bot's code with stuff about
you, personally. Given that this coder is obviously either a)
unskilled, b) lazy, or c) both that tweaking regarding Will Dockery
seems out of character for himm, and - as I said - a bit creepy.
Of course, it could be he's just a college professor - everybody knows
what freaks /they/ are...
--
Wow, that's a lot to say nothing in such a short period of time.

Imbecile.
0x0000
2009-01-16 23:51:59 UTC
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Post by Orson Wells as CitizenCain
Only because Dockery stole the article <slap>
Writes the man(?) who just copy-and-pasted a poem in another
thread yesterday and tried to pass it off as his(?) own...
Dockery if you're so confused you can't tell genders
The guy's posting under a girl's name... no confusion about that,
my little midget friend.
..how stupid you are? "We know, stupid."
... heh. You know stupid like you invented it? "We know."
Let me guess...you're the pitcher to Dockery's catcher? Watch
out...I hear he loves "spit balls."
heh - where'd ya hear that?
The tiny voices in his even tinier homoerotic brain, obviously... heh.
He's obviously very turned on by the idea of you engaging in these
activities he's bringing up? WtF * If we adopt the 'bot psychology
POV, these pronouncements it makes are the work of the person who
designed the vocabulary of the bot - typically the programmer. So it
is that individual - the coder [or "programmer"] of the bot - that has
such an obvious crush on you. Or it could be that the thing is just
programmed to send that type of output to whomever it's targeted to -
you, in this case.
Note that it's incapable of coming up with a directed response -
probably has memory problems similar to the CyberTwin bot - I.E.
doesn't remember the beginning of conversations, and so on.
Which raises the really creepy part: It looks like the coder has
modified either the bot's database or the bot's code with stuff about
you, personally. Given that this coder is obviously either a)
unskilled, b) lazy, or c) both that tweaking regarding Will Dockery
seems out of character for himm, and - as I said - a bit creepy.
Of course, it could be he's just a college professor - everybody knows
what freaks /they/ are...
--
Wow, that's a lot to say nothing in such a short period of time.
Yes, I understand your problems with your own lack of buffer capabilities...
Post by Orson Wells as CitizenCain
Imbecile.
Poor self-image. But then, what could one expect from a bot?
Orsen Wells w/Citizen Cain
2009-01-17 02:31:45 UTC
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Post by 0x0000
Post by Orson Wells as CitizenCain
Only because Dockery stole the article <slap>
Writes the man(?) who just copy-and-pasted a poem in another
thread yesterday and tried to pass it off as his(?) own...
Dockery if you're so confused you can't tell genders
The guy's posting under a girl's name... no confusion about that,
my little midget friend.
..how stupid you are? "We know, stupid."
... heh. You know stupid like you invented it? "We know."
Let me guess...you're the pitcher to Dockery's catcher? Watch
out...I hear he loves "spit balls."
heh - where'd ya hear that?
The tiny voices in his even tinier homoerotic brain, obviously... heh.
He's obviously very turned on by the idea of you engaging in these
activities he's bringing up? WtF * If we adopt the 'bot psychology
POV, these pronouncements it makes are the work of the person who
designed the vocabulary of the bot - typically the programmer. So it
is that individual - the coder [or "programmer"] of the bot - that has
such an obvious crush on you. Or it could be that the thing is just
programmed to send that type of output to whomever it's targeted to -
you, in this case.
Note that it's incapable of coming up with a directed response -
probably has memory problems similar to the CyberTwin bot - I.E.
doesn't remember the beginning of conversations, and so on.
Which raises the really creepy part: It looks like the coder has
modified either the bot's database or the bot's code with stuff about
you, personally. Given that this coder is obviously either a)
unskilled, b) lazy, or c) both that tweaking regarding Will Dockery
seems out of character for himm, and - as I said - a bit creepy.
Of course, it could be he's just a college professor - everybody knows
what freaks /they/ are...
--
Wow, that's a lot to say nothing in such a short period of time.
Yes, I understand your problems with your own lack of buffer
capabilities...
Your porridge is too hot and your problems with the English language too
cold but your ignorance is just right. Beware of little girls wearing red
clothing.
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Post by Orson Wells as CitizenCain
Imbecile.
Poor self-image. But then, what could one expect from a bot?
Contrary to popular belief, chickens came first, for without a chicken there
is no egg. Also, you are annoying and humbling to those who feel stupidity
is a religion.

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